Tuesday, October 4, 2011

RemembeRED:: Conjure

Prompt: Writing short posts is an excellent way to flex your word choice muscles. Which word is the most clear? Poignant? Direct? This week I want you to conjure something. An object, a person, a feeling, a color, a season- whatever you like.



Roiling, whirling, dizzy...I hold very still, taking shallow breaths. The ceiling dips, and turns, then spins. The floor turns in the opposite direction, the deck of a ship pummeled by gigantic waves.

Eyes closed, maybe? Breathe deeply, perhaps?

The bed is a roller coaster, with loops that turn upside down and right side up and seem to fling your stomach into weightlessness before pulling you back to earth.

Cramp in the gut while the bed becomes a barrel rolling fast down a hill and into a river.

A belch escapes, then another. Swallow that viscuous saliva back, jaw clenched. Deep breath through gritted teeth.

I hurl myself out of bed and pray that I make it.

18 comments:

  1. Wow. You really got me experiencing it... I could feel bile rising, my sense of balance shaken, the bitter, acidic taste in my tongue...

    Great response to the prompt!

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  2. Yikes! Get well soon! What was it: hangover, food poisoning? Keep a bowl by the bed and make sure you get plenty of TLC. Let me know when you can keep it down, and I'll bring you some soup... ;)

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  3. So well done. Though I kind of wish I wasn't reading it over breakfast ;)

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  4. Oh man. I could really feel this. As I'm reading, I notice my face is sour - like I'm preparing for vomit. Good stuff. ;-)

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  5. I think I spent most of my 20's doing this...it was so vivid, I almost ran to the bathroom. That means it's WELL DONE. ;)

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  6. That was good! I thought you were talking about sea sickness then I realized it was about *well, you know.* Great writing!

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  7. You just described the first 5 months of my 3 pregnancies. Such torture. Certain foods or clothes (elastic-band black pants) can still trigger nausea. I threw out all my black pants.

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  8. haha ok, i sincerely feel a little queasy after reading that!

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  9. Lord, that was me last week plus a sinus infection. That made me ill all over again. And I mean that in the nicest of ways. :)

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  10. Good job.... it's hard to describe the look on my face... it's like ewww... and thank goodness it's not me.

    I hate feeling like that.

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  11. Oh my, a little too descriptive, you've got me feeling a little green over here!!

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  12. Great response, got me a little. Thank goodness I wasn't eating!

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  13. I could feel it. Great description! I'd say you captured the moment so well.

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  14. My stomach is hurting reading this. Well done!

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  15. That totally ROCKED! Seriously, what else is there to say? I loved how how you used the word HURL when describing how you got out of bed.

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  16. Yikes I shouldn't have read this right after lunch. Feeling dizzy now!


    PS. As for the other post - I feel for you but no worries it happens to the best of us!

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  17. Ugh! My stomach roiled as I read it. Great use of metaphor for descriptions of how it feels.

    Debbie @ Day In and Day Out

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