Monday, August 4, 2014

In The Light Of Day

The carcass lies still now.

Blood has congealed on the asphalt;

Maggots grow hungry

Within the fetid wounds.

The muddy tire tracks

Still visible across the corpse

Are those cunning lies

You whispered

Last night, in the darkness.

I believed your kiss.



  1. Dark, very very dark. You create a lot of intrigue in your final lines around the kiss. Good job!

  2. That simile is powerful! And I love the accusation in the last line.

  3. I agree with Nate and Glasgow! Great job!

  4. "The muddy tire tracks... cunning lies" That's some strong stuff there. I really liked this one.

  5. This is so visceral. Fantastic imagery! I particularly love the muddy tire tracks as lies. :)

  6. I had to get past my initial "ewww" response to reread and appreciate this. It was worth exploring again.

  7. The title for this is so the light of day, it all looks so different. Nice! Beautifully written.

  8. I love how you mixed up such disturbing, physical images with the damage done by a lie.


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