Mark's breath huffed out in exhalation at the force of the impact with another person.
The phone flew out of his hand. Stumbling, he reached out his hands to
catch his balance. One hand touched soft warm skin that his fingers
instinctively gripped in an effort to find stability. When he was sure
that he wasn't going to fall, Mark looked at the person he had run
into. The apology died on his lips.
She was the most beautiful woman he
had ever seen. A brilliant blaze of red hair fell to her shoulders.
Her skin seemed to glow, her lips a perfect bow of color below a pair of
cornflower blue eyes.
The moment seemed to
transfix them both, and they stared at each other. A corner of her
mouth slowly lifted in a smirk. Eyebrows raised, she looked down, and
his eyes followed hers. His hand was somehow between her skin and her
shirt.
His palm was conspicuously palming a single perfect breast.
Mark
hastily extracted himself amid visions of a harassment lawsuit and
angry boyfriends. Horrified, he opened his mouth, ready to abjectly beg
forgiveness, when the woman put her index finger on his lips to silence
him. She eyed him speculatively, head cocked to the side, a smile
spreading across her features like sunshine.
This is in response to Write On Edge's prompt: This week, write about collision. It can be literal or figurative, large or small. And while this is based upon a real incident, it is actually fiction.
And I'm going to try something new this week, and participate in the Trifecta Writing Challenge, where the prompt was the word HEART. Except that I didn't see anything clearly delineated to indicate a deadline, and I missed it. My fault entirely, but go check out these other writers anyway!
That was good. I've been meaning to check out Trifecta too. Thanks for the reminder. Here's to next week...hope to see you.
ReplyDeleteOhhhh, I love when you write like this.
ReplyDeleteMy biggest fan! I love that you like my writing.
DeleteAaaaaaah I LOVE this. I was LITERALLY transported into their world in that moment. My.... :) #awesome
ReplyDeleteTrifecta runs from Monday to Thursday with a bonus weekend prompt Friday to Sunday :)
ReplyDeleteFun collision. Seems like it worked out in the end for the two people
Good to know! Thank you. I am a little slow sometimes!
DeleteI LOVED this!!! Right up my alley and you told it perfectly. He owes her dinner for the feel!
ReplyDeleteThat's what I think, too. And a steak dinner, at that!
DeleteLove this, those last lines so perfect!
ReplyDeleteMinor concrit: The first line reads really awkwardly for me. "huffed out in exhalation" detracts from the impact. If you revisit, try something like "His breathe was knocked from his lungs." Let us feel the actual force behind the collision.
Great take on the prompt. Great job!
You are right. I looked at that sentence several times, too! I must have been tired last night.
DeleteOooooh la la!
ReplyDeleteFantastic meet-cute. Sexy, clever.
ReplyDeleteSo naughty in a nice way. Like :)
ReplyDeleteNow THAT is a collision! Well done and full of sass.
ReplyDeleteI like the subtle tension running through this and the final, teasing exchange.
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