Friday, July 13, 2012

WOE: Forbidden

Write On Edge promptLast week, we wrote about freedom.  This week, we’d like you to grab the pendulum and swing in the other direction.  You have 450 words to write a fiction or creative non-fiction piece about the forbidden or the taboo.

"Don't turn around."

His breath felt hot on my neck as it chased his words into my ear.  There was no way that I could turn around, and he knew it.  The subway car was jammed full of revelers waiting to travel home after the victory celebration.  It was a very public place, and we were right in the middle of it.   As the man behind me laughed, I felt another breath of warmth on my neck. He correctly interpreted my lack of movement as acquiescence. 

A strong arm snaked around my waist, encircling my body in a firm grip.  

The back of my skirt slowly began to rise, the material warm from the crush of bodies around us.  It slithered up the bare skin of my legs and my backside until it was around my waist.  My skin was electrified by the close contact of the others on the subway with us.  Even if no one could move, someone could still notice, although they might initially attribute my flushed skin to the warmth of so many bodies.  The crowd shifted as the last stragglers merrily entered, and I found my lower body pushed back against his hardness as people jostled for a good place to stand. We were fused together by the press of people.  The rough texture of his jeans caressed my bare skin and left me breathless and unsteady, my knees weak.  I wiggled my hips against him, wanting more contact.

And then the car began to move. 


  1. Okay! That was very HOT first thing in the morning. Reading all these today should be really, really fun. Loved "The rough texture of his jeans caressed my bare skin and left me breathless and unsteady, my knees weak." but mostly the "don't turn around". There's something about commands.

  2. Stupid car!!! I want more. Well, you know what I mean. :)

  3. Nothing is more taboo than a public place, where someone could catch you, notice you.

    Nice take on the prompt!

    1. Since I am not a public person, I thought I would experiment.

  4. Wow! Great job showing their private interaction in the midst of the crowd of people. It definitely has the feel of something forbidden, and you really captured the concept well.

  5. Um... you had 450 words. You should have used more of them ;-)

    Hot stuff! I loved it!

  6. Is it getting warm in here? Definitely a taboo situation here. All the prompts this week are about sex or children. It's fitting I guess, as you can't have one without the other. :-)

  7. Great job. I was wary at first, dreading it was going to turn bad. Very hot.

  8. Wow. Another scene I wish I would be able to write! I love the details that make it soooo hot without making it sleezy. Great job!


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