Monday, November 17, 2014

Microstories: Persephone's Love


Prolonged gazes, 
surreptitious smiles
Brief patters of flirtation
Drew them together
Every spring

Bright drops 
Melting ice
Rivulets rolling,
Cascading
Over trembling hands
As he drank 
Her sweet kiss

A deluge of passion

Halted only by the 
Sudden arrival 
Of hateful Winter.


14 comments:

  1. This is lovely, Tina! Very evocative. Especially - Cascading/Over trembling hands/As he drank/Her sweet kiss

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  2. OMG, how I've missed you!!! Yes, I know it's all my fault. Back into the blog visiting at last after a LOOOOOOONG hiatus. And SO looking forward to more of your awesome stuff!!!!

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  3. Deluge : )
    Love this poem, Tina, and the way it rains down the page.

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  4. Like Kymm, I love the word deluge. It's just evokes emotions.

    Winter ruins everything. (Even the word 'snow' makes me sad)

    This was beautiful.

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  5. Damn you, winter! I was really loving their love.

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  6. Love the pacing in this - the long opening words and actions, followed by the shorter sharp ones of the second stanza that make the deluge come alive. Beautiful.

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  7. I like everything about this piece. Nice job!

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  8. oh how gorgeous! Love this, "As he drank Her sweet kiss" !!

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  9. I like your version of the story better: Persephone and Hades being in love.

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  10. One of my favourite stories and you tell it so poetically. Wonderful!

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  11. UGH! And winter totally arrived this week, too. lol You did a wonderful job with your words!

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  12. "Hateful Winter" indeed! Your descriptions are sublime, and so very concise.

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  13. Have not experienced a terrible winter but I this describes it well.

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