Now with extra sauce!
Loved the accent, I could see that crazy, lust-filled woman swaying. (Such a great word for the waiting..the swaying)
Now that is a very vivid piece! Really striking.
The imagery complete with the accent you chose brought your character and story to life. Awesome!
Very vivid! Especially that accent.
Wonderful voice this mama has, but she is obviously a woman not to be crossed. Fantastic how you got so much story into this.
Love the voice! Your 42 words pack a mean punch. Nice job!
I welcome comments, but reserve the right to correct your spelling because I am OCD about it!