Wednesday, December 10, 2014

Microstories: The Wrong Door

In your eyes

I can believe

the

blush of true love

implicit in our first kiss;

Heartbeat to heartbeat,
A true marriage
Ageless
Laughter
and Love.

So much more

Than my fantasy

Will

Disintegrate,

Vanish,

If you open that locked door

Tonight.




8 comments:

  1. Such a controlled piece, TIna! Love the threatening tone - the one-word cascade - mixed with vulnerability at the end. Excellent title, too!

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  2. I love how this starts all romantic like a fairy tale then quickly escalates into betrayal. Brilliant. The wrong door..and definitely the wrong choice. ♥

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  3. Loved the way you expressed a lot in just few words.

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  4. The way you structured this was really fantastic. And I love how you answered the question. Wonderful job!

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  5. I liked a lot of this, especially the emotional components. I am confused by the use of "Than" when I expected "Then," but somehow, it works.
    Found you on Yeah, Writes. Looking forward to more.

    Best to you,

    Sally

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  6. You're getting REALLY good now, girlfriend!

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