Monday, June 9, 2014

The Camera Lies

Smile pretty, chin up!
Never let anything seep into the cracks of the façade.
But I did.
You did.
A single word wormed its way underneath the foundation and what was left of me collapsed.

A single word laid me low:
Hello.


20 comments:

  1. This is good, too good! The last bit... Lovely take.

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  2. You had me at hello, too, T. Great work.

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  3. Oh. Yes, I met him once too.

    That moment is hard to forget. 😊

    Happy Monday my friend.

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  4. Smartly and confidently done...great rhythm and perfect ending.

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  5. The ending is really great. I love the line "A single word laid me low."

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  6. Oh, this is good. Nice job!

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  7. Wonderfully done. I could feel the word worming its way. And such an innocent little word at that.

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  8. He had her at hello. Priceless!

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  9. 'what was left of me collapsed' *swoon* Rocking 'em, Tina!

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  10. I liked how you led up to the collapse and ended on Hello

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  11. ooh.. this was a good one. it really brings you deep into the imagination, especially with the title and where the story goes... great plot development in such a few sentences. props!

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  12. Oooh, it is as simple and incredibly complex as that!

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  13. As Andrea commented above -- it's as simple and complex as that. Nicely done.

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  14. So cleverly done. A great piece of writing.

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  15. Oh - those last two lines really clinched it. Great, great emotional little piece. Thanks so much for linking it up!

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  16. You had me at the cédille in façade.

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  17. Some facades crack easily.. if we just knew...

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  18. Your choice of rhyming at the end really drove the idea home. Lots of skill here!

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