Monday, June 16, 2014

Anticipation

Vibration swoops
around the stadium,
a swirl of sound,
birds racing
through the heavy air
to roost in the rafters
while below us
on the green field,
the representatives,
our warrior past
fight our battles
by proxy
but the victory
still is sweet.

17 comments:

  1. Warriors, indeed! Love the image of the birds racing, but at the Bills Stadium, there are bats at dusk as well (yikes)

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  2. Ah the worldcup fever! Dont watch, can never know.

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  3. The rush of fans, excitement is the sound of victory.

    I loved the last line, it captured the feeling of the way we each wrap ourselves in the flag of our team. GOOOOAAALLLL!

    :)

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  4. "but the victory still is sweet." This piece is a thread of lovely phrases tied together with an underlying rush of excitement.

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    1. I'm just going to say 'ditto' to Inner Zone's comments! Well done :))

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    2. I concur with TheInnerZone like a wordsmith. Very well done. :)

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  5. Love this - captures the World Cup, or any other green-fielded battle, perfectly.

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  6. I like the image of victory swooping. Good one!

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  7. Really evocative. You've captured the sights and sounds so well.

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  8. Great sounds, "swoop" and "roost"... I can hear and see this scene.

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  9. Ooh, nicely done! Fantastic imagery. :)

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  10. Very exciting and so descriptive that it almost makes me wish I were a fan :-)

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  11. You painted a great scene with the imagery you used.

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  12. of course the victory is sweet and the tension around a World cup match is well captured!

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  13. I love how you started this one, and managed to keep up the level till the ending. Very well-written :)

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  14. Haha Go, Brasil!! Love how you pulled us in with the bird's-eye-view, the swooping and roosting. < 3

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  15. I'm not a sports fan at all, but your words made me want to be part of the excitement.

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