Tuesday, February 11, 2014

Gone Wrong

Man be crazy
gone
Tried to leave me
gone
Tried to walk out
gone 
Poor fool
gone
I shot him dead
gone
Kept that sucker's head
gone
He ain't leavin' now
he gone




The prompt is 33 words about love gone wrong.  Without using these words: love, sad, tears, wept, heart, or pain. Pretty much the lyrics of every country song ever.  I decided upon a blues vibe, which isn't always depressing.
love
sad
tears
wept
heart
pain

17 comments:

  1. it's pieces like this that I love most from you. You have the Vim and passion (*and the crazy*) to make it all fit together.

    (he deserved it!)
    hope you're having a good week

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  2. You do the dark and crazy GOOD, Tina! My favorite stuff from you comes from that place you go...

    Excellent!!!!!!

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  3. Revenge. Done. Right.

    This is crazy good, Tina!

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  4. Yep, he gone! I loved this craziness! Great write!

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  5. And now she's doing 20-life...

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  6. I love the bluesy spin - I almost heard Dinah Washington singing this one!

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  7. This is great! I think they've both got the crazy going on :)

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  8. Love the repetition. It really works in this piece. Great work!

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  9. Is this bad that this made me laugh? I can imagine this being strummed in some blues bar. Nice write! Thanks for sharing! Voting opens soon, don't forget...

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  10. I love the wit and the cleverly crafted words. It flows with a lively pace I like...guess that's because he's gone.

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  11. Of course you kept the bones... couldn't be anything wrong in a love like that...or?

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  12. I am so gone over this! ;) Loved the sassiness and the lyrical flow. Fantastic job!

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