Bright red strawberry lipstick,
Arms raised, a hug, a kiss
Welcome home.
I smile, while
Flashes of orange, smoke
My friend, his life
Bright red I can never stop
Gushes into the dirt.
Not really sure why this one floated to the top of my consciousness, but I'm going to go with it.
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A powerful take on ptsd. Great work.
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DeleteWhew. That hurt my heart to read. A lot of punch to those few words.
ReplyDelete"Gushes into the dirt." What a visual and emotional juxaposition if I'm reading it right. Like what you do, T.
ReplyDeleteYou're reading it right. Thanks!
DeleteA punch to the heart, to the gut, and pretty much every other part of the anatomy. Beautifully done.
ReplyDeleteWow. This is so good. Intense and uncomfortable read.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteThe descriptions of the scene are powerful, as is the use of the color. Excellent work.
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DeleteOh that's a horrific ending for something that started out innocently enough. I likee! :D
ReplyDeleteYou did well depicting the reality of so many with only 33 words.
ReplyDeleteSo true that the tiniest thing, the most innocuous detail can be a trigger.
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