Saturday, July 27, 2013

Coming Home From The War


Bright red strawberry lipstick,

Arms raised, a hug, a kiss

Welcome home.

I smile, while

Flashes of orange, smoke

My friend, his life

Bright red I can never stop

Gushes into the dirt.



Not really sure why this one floated to the top of my consciousness, but I'm going to go with it. 


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18 comments:

  1. A powerful take on ptsd. Great work.

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  2. Whew. That hurt my heart to read. A lot of punch to those few words.

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  3. "Gushes into the dirt." What a visual and emotional juxaposition if I'm reading it right. Like what you do, T.

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  4. This does pack a punch to the heart. The guilt of those who return, never being able to step out of the battle because they've seen too much. You've captured it in that last sentence. Well done.

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  5. A punch to the heart, to the gut, and pretty much every other part of the anatomy. Beautifully done.

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  6. Wow. This is so good. Intense and uncomfortable read.

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  7. The descriptions of the scene are powerful, as is the use of the color. Excellent work.

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  8. Oh that's a horrific ending for something that started out innocently enough. I likee! :D

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  9. You did well depicting the reality of so many with only 33 words.

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  10. So true that the tiniest thing, the most innocuous detail can be a trigger.

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