Saturday, February 23, 2013

Never Mind




All he wanted
was the gentle lapping
of inner blankness,
the relief of needles,
pricked,
to abide in
the comforting quiescence
and devour the remnants
of hollow-boned
corporeality
now quietly still.

Never mind.



Trifextra Prompt:
This weekend we are playing another type of word game with you.  Below are photos from the 33rd page of one of our very favorite books, Elizabeth Strout's Olive Kitteridge.  What we want you to do is to scour the page (click to enlarge), choose 33 words, and reshape those words into a piece of your own.  Your piece does not have to tell an entire story.  We just want to see what you can do with this particular word bank.  Punctuation is up to you.  Use whatever you need, whether or not it appears in the photos.

16 comments:

  1. Oh, I hope he gets what he wants in some way! (:

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    1. Maybe he just needs to take a nap and get over it.

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  2. all he wanted . . . never mind

    so many folks put off what they want - this is well done!

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  3. I'm not sure he should get what he wants here... at least the way I interpret it. Thought-provoking...

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  4. "Never mind." So sad. Great job.

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    1. Thank you! As adults, we sometimes have to put other people's wants above our own. It's a hard lesson.

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  5. Never mind. - great last line
    your words flowed very smoothly..

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  6. Love this. You can't tell there was a word limit. Great ending! Lol! :)

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    1. When Magnetic poetry came out, I spent hours in front of the fridge, playing with the words. It was good practice for this exercise!

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  7. Oh my but this is good! You went a different place altogether. Just wonderful :D

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    1. I was trying for a different place--glad I got there! Thank you for reading!

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  8. Lots of good writing coming out this weekend. Your story is certainly one of the best! Very compelling use of those 33 words. Thank you.

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  9. That's "all" he wanted???
    Great piece.

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