Friday, December 6, 2013

Dazzled

Bravely I have

poured my paltry essence

into the basin

of your regard,

in hopes that you might

dazzle me with

the cacophony of your smile

until I am myopic in my affections.





Thirty-three words including myopic, dazzle, and basin.  Yeah, that's all I've got. 

9 comments:

  1. Poetic and strong. This is so well crafted. Great job.

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  2. The basin of your regard.. nice turn of phrase. Smooth inclusion of the words. Great flow, I like it a lot.

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  3. As always, I love the flow and effortlessness of your work. What a beautiful piece.

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  4. Oh you are VERY clever!! But you know that, right?!?!?!

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  5. "...dazzle me with the cacophony of your smile" - WOW. I absolutely love everything about this phrase. It feels like love-borne synesthesia. Beautiful.

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  6. I love "basin of your regard," too. And the way you used brave and paltry was so very fitting. It takes guts to take a chance on romance. Great 33 words, Tina!

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  7. Tina - I feel you like you are inside my head writing this. It is absolutely beautiful. The basin of your regard is pure poetry, as is the cacophony of your smile. Brilliant work.

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  8. Lovely. Basin of your regard is, as the others have said, sublime. Thanks for linking up.

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  9. Haha Myopic in my affections. Oh, yeah. (You got plenty, btw!)

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