Wednesday, April 24, 2013

Uprising

 "Under no circumstances will this marriage be called off!"  My father yelled.  "It is done."

I had returned from the mountain, the gold arm band on my upper arm.  My mother had noticed it and accused me of stealing.  I told her, then my father, about the crone on the mountain. My father demanded that I give him the arm band. I refused. He muttered about devilry, but did not try to take the band. Instead, he slapped my mother and told her to prepare for the wedding feast in three days.

My father dragged me into the square on the third day,my mother fluttering nervously behind. The crone was waiting the moment we stepped past the doorway. She hadn't been there before; her sudden presence gave everyone pause. The crone's eyes were opaque once more, yet she was not disoriented.

"What do you do to this child?" The crone's voice was chilling in its ecstasy.  The villagers who had gathered for the wedding grew silent.

"That is no concern of yours, old woman!" My father screamed.

"You shall reap what you have sown." The crone's prophecy swirled around us.

A golden man came striding into camp, the burning light of the sun radiating from his pores.  He approached my father, a stern look on his face.

"You would refuse the will of a god?"  Apollo asked.  "The arm band was a sign to you that she is my betrothed.  And you chose to ignore it? You chose to covet my gift?"

"Oh great Apollo!" My father, and all of the villagers, threw themselves prostrate before him.

"I do not like it that my betrothed is treated so poorly,"  Apollo towered over my father.

At his words, my father sat up, his face a rictus of horror, and burst into flame. The Sun God then pointed at my old home; everything seemed to burst into flames.

I watched my village burn from the back of my beloved's chariot.





This is a continuation of a story I started here.





: tranceespecially : a mystic or prophetic trance

21 comments:

  1. Fun post! I am checking out this trifecta site :)

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  2. It is great to see the old myths taken seriously, I hadn't seen your previous post so I went and read it and now I am looking forward to the next installment. LM x

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    1. I spent a lot of time reading mythology as a kid, so it's kind of stuck in my brain. Thanks for reading--I really appreciate it!

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    2. I read a bit when younger, as well. The old myths bit deep. I hope there is a next installment? It is a great story. LM x

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  3. Um, so that wasn't about Larry? You are such a creative writer!

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    1. Lol! Larry is even more pasty-white than I am. If he is out in the sun longer than ten minutes, he burns.

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  4. Great story! I went to the link to read the first part. Very engaging. I love that the father is burned along with what had been her abusive life. Does that make me a bad person?!

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    1. I hate that women, and children, were regularly viewed as property rather than people. So whenever my imagination lets me get in a jab at the system, I try to enjoy it! :-)

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  5. I do love revisits to mythological themes - this was great, thank you.

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  6. You definitely have to watch it when you cross a sun god! What fun!

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  7. I love mythology and the places your creative mind goes! I'm glad she could watch back and see her past burned. You are so good at this!

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  8. Yeah, I didn't think all that prostrating was gonna be much help :D I just love the wicked revenge of gods and goddesses.

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  9. I think Apollo won this battle! I love the phrase about the prophecy swirling around them.

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  10. Wonderful! I want to read more! (The crone character is great, btw.)

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  11. OOOOOOO! I loved this. You did such a great job of setting the scene that I was so startled when Apollo showed up and so glad that he gave her father his due. When a god comes calling, in general it's a super good idea to do what he says.

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  12. I like how you crafted the first two paragraphs. opaque crone eyes is just awesome.

    I need more of this series...GO

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  13. The last thing you want on your hands is an angry god.

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  14. I love the crone - and the way you used the word. Her father's face a rictus of horror - I like that phrase. Nice writing - and a satisfying story!

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  15. Wow! What a cool story. I remembered the first installment and thinking this story wouldn't end happily. I'm glad I was wrong. Great writing, as usual.

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  16. Never mess with a crone and her prophesy, especially when there's a sun god involved. Just saying.

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