Saturday, March 2, 2013

A Hard Lesson



This weekend's challenge is a personal narrative in 33 words.
For the weekend challenge we're asking for exactly thirty-three words written in first person narrative. Have fun with it and we'll meet you back here on 3/3! - See more at: http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/#sthash.JSVp3HqV.dpuf
For the weekend challenge we're asking for exactly thirty-three words written in first person narrative. Have fun with it and we'll meet you back here on 3/3! - See more at: http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/#sthash.JSVp3HqV.dpuf
For the weekend challenge we're asking for exactly thirty-three words written in first person narrative. Have fun with it and we'll meet you back here on 3/3! - See more at: http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/#sthash.JSVp3HqV.dpuf

For the weekend challenge we're asking for exactly thirty-three words written in first person narrative. Have fun with it and we'll meet you back here on 3/3! - See more at: http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/#sthash.zd8zn0ZH.dpuf
For the weekend challenge we're asking for exactly thirty-three words written in first person narrative. Have fun with it and we'll meet you back here on 3/3! - See more at: http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/#sthash.zd8zn0ZH.dpuf

Round and around we twirled,

until I was delightfully

dizzy with love.

I turned to beg

the love of my life

never leave me--

he was gone.

Never go dancing at Niagra Falls.






27 comments:

  1. To call this a twist means something in two different ways, huh?

    I the whimsical approach and the well-written build. Good one, Tina.

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  2. Ooh! I was twirling around right with them and took the plunge as well. Loved this!

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  3. oh, no - is it terrible of me to have chuckled at your end? :)

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    1. Not at all! That is what I did, too!

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  4. Ha!ha!Look before you dance in love;-)He really fell in love-what a twist!Loved it Tina:-)

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  5. I was thinking you twirled til you hurled, but far less predictable...as usual! ;)

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    1. Usually I do tend to hurl when I twirl too much, but I thought I'd take it in a different direction. In case anyone was eating...

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  6. lol I was getting all mushy and BAM Very funny.

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    1. Usually the BAM happens when things start to get mushy. At least in my life!

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  7. Geez! How can I get suckered in a 33 word story?! That is one amazing job of writing and word choice! Didn't see the twist coming. Laughed out loud when I came to it. My wife just looked up and wants to know what is so funny. I said it was this story. Read it to her. Now she is laughing, too. Well done!

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    1. I am glad that I could make two people laugh for a bit!

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  8. A cool piece of writing. I will never dance at Niagra Falls.

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  9. Loved the twist. Funny and cleverly written.

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  10. Getting caught up is such an important part of love
    . Isn't it? Holding on is too. Hee!

    Loved the spinning and twirling, it took me right there.. And over the falls. ;-)

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  11. This was delightful-and then I got to the ending and I completely fell in love with it!! It also gave me my first good laugh of the day! Thanks for that!!

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  12. ha! :D I cracked up, so I suppose that's a compliment!

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  13. Wonderful piece! I was totally caught up in the moment. Nice take on the prompt!

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  14. Ah hahaha! You totally caught me by surprise. I was expecting something poignant or painful; instead, I got belly laughs. Nicely done!

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