Saturday, January 19, 2013

Old Make Way




Prompt:  And now, on to our Trifextra.  We want you to choose one of the pictures below and give us a 33-word response to it.  Your responses will be judged by the community this weekend.

I have had such a horrible week that I completely forgot about the word limit for Trifecta this past week.  It was in the back of my mind, but since I usually write when I'm half asleep, and since the story was going so perfectly, I called it a night when I was able to get it under 500.  In the light of day, I am glad, for the story's sake.  However, I will endeavor to remember the rules in the future. I will even write them down on a post-it and place it on my monitor, where it will stay until the cat eats it.  

This one's for you, Grandpa. 


My grandfather's pride,

Which once turned the rich, raw earth

Now sits on fallow ground,

Sadly covered in dust.

Time passes.

Old must make way for the New

Yesterday's strongest steel becomes rust.



VinothChandar / Nature Photos / CC BY







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39 comments:

  1. That last line cuts to the bone. How true. Well done!

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  2. Very well done. A bittersweet description.

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  3. Change. So much is said on so many levels in your poem. Very well-done, as usual.
    On a separate note, congrats on your "almost" third place standing in the last challenge. :) It was well-deserved recognition for fine work.

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  4. Yesterday's strongest steel becomes rust... fabulous line! And I love the inference here, the relationship, the remembrance, the connections between you and he. Those live on.

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  5. This was a bittersweet way to think about change. Sometimes it's welcome, needed and other times you're not ready for it and don't want it. Loved the last line (AND your last entry which I didn't even realize was long because I was so engaged in the story). Nicely done here!

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    1. I didn't realize it was too long until after I linked it as the third place piece. :-)

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  6. Memories last longer than steel (:

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  7. It might become rust, but that rust is beautiful as are our memories of our once strong ancestors. By the way - I loved your spider piece!

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    1. Thank you! Writing down my memories will help me share them with future generations.

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  8. Change can be sad, when we see what is strong become weakened. At least the memories of the good days stay with us!

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    1. I have some happy memories of my grandpa and his tractor!

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  9. Beautiful memories! hold them close at heart.

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  10. your grandpa would have been touched. :)

    and, my first rendition went much longer than the required 33 words, also. I had to do some deep cutting myself. :)

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    1. Thank you. I think he would have been tickled.

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  11. Out with the old, in with the new, cutting a bit too close to home lately!

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  12. Very good. I'm sure your grandfather would have been blessed by this. :)

    Blessings,
    Cheryl

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  13. Very poignant way of portraying this photo. "Strongest steel...becomes rust" perfectly coveys your point.

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    1. Thank you. I think that my grandfather lost his strength when he was unable to farm anymore. That thought was in my head while I wrote this.

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  14. Everything goes the way of the dodo sooner or later, no matter how strong it might seem. We have to have endings for new beginnings to exist :)

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    1. I know, I know. I always want to hug the memories close, anyway.

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  15. Profound sentiment in 33 words. Well done.

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  16. So very true,"Old must make way for the New".Wealth of sentiments in this piece,loved
    it:-)

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  17. Lovely. My cat eats things, too. :-)

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