Friday, January 4, 2013

At The Core

 

On to the weekend challenge.  As you'll recall from your elementary science class days, the structure of the earth can be divided most simply into three sections: core, mantle, crust. Give us 33 words from it.  Interpret the prompt however you wish--literal, metaphorical, or somewhere in between. 






 With the occurrence of each cataclysm

The crust we have so carefully cultivated

Furiously flakes away in the maelstrom.

The mantle offers little protection.

The core is thus revealed,

If only to ourselves.

16 comments:

  1. What raw words - beautifully done.

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  2. ..the core is thus revealed"-true!Well put:-)

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  3. Nice...great use of metaphor! My fav part is the last two lines, and the last especially. Speaks to me of a rite of passage.

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  4. digging beneath the layers to discover who we really are . . . . a journey well taken.

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  5. Oh how true, so true. Super use of words.
    dk

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  6. It's that time, before it grows over again, that we see (in others and ourselves) what we're all about. Brilliant job! Thanks for sharing!

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  7. I like the personal journey at play in your piece. Well done!

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  8. I love the vulnerability of this. Lovely.

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  9. Damnit lumdog! You used my comment. While so difficult at times, I love vulnerability! Wonderfully portrayed here!

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  10. Nice job here! Sometimes we may not want to see the core, but it is a good thing to pry beneath the layers.

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  11. Very powerful. The scientific wording makes this all the more poignant.

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  12. That last line really hit me. Great piece!

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  13. you had me at cataclysm then hooked me like a common junkie with maelstorm. Great word play. *clapping*

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  14. I love the last line. The idea that we hide even from ourselves - so true, isn't it?

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