Friday, June 22, 2012

WOE: Active

Prompt:  Pick one and make it active voice.
  1. [he/she/I] was devastated by [...]
  2. [feeling] was experienced by [...]
  3. [person/thing] was possessed by [...]

The loss devastated Catherine, but the time to stop and look for her favorite gun rushed past like a flash flood.  Before she figured out how to navigate the hysterical crowd, she found herself deposited  a mile away from her house.  Unarmed, she would have to find her way back home to her family.

How did I do?


  1. Very nice... so many questions now.... how old is Catherine? A mile isn't so far, but what could she be confronted with that could take up 400 pages in a novel?

    So many questions...

    1. Well, I was thinking about zombies, but that's just because I'm reading World War Z right now...

  2. Yikes! That was very active and exciting!

    You do need to check this sentence: "...she found herself deposited her a mile..." is "her" extra? Or supposed to be something else?

  3. Very nice. Made me very curious as to why she needed a gun.

  4. There are a lot of questions here, huh? Nice active voice!

  5. Zombies! I love Zombie stories. Have you seen Shawn of the Dead? Fido?

    Love the "favorite gun" bit. When my brother was a police officer, he named his service pistol "Rachel, the lightning rapier of death". For some reason, that's where I went. Very nicely done!

  6. Wow. For so few words you created one heck of an opening! I, too, would love to see where this could go.


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