Friday, November 4, 2011

Red Writing Hood: 8:00 PM

Prompt: This week I want you to take me to your version of 8:00 -AM or PM, fiction or creative nonfiction- in 200 words or less. This is a typical 8:00 PM at my house. I refuse to acknowledge mornings until at least 10:00 AM.


A knight in shining armor races by us, plastic duct-taped sword upraised. He is slaying dragons and saving the world. Behind him lie the remains of all that he has conquered. I laugh; my knight has his armor on backwards! I look over at my husband, who smiles back at me, and closes his laptop. We pull ourselves up from the couch.

My tiny hero gallops by us again, charging into the fray.

"Time for bed," I tell him.

15 comments:

  1. For the record, I think that I misunderstood the prompt, or my post would have been longer. Brain cells are at a premium these days, it seems!

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  2. we have a a lot of duct taped stuff too...adn I have 3 girls...

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  3. I like it.

    I've never seen a comment caveat threatening to correct my spelling before. In a sort of weird way unique to me (and probably thousands of others) it kind of makes me want to spell words rong.

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  4. This was so sweet. It put a huge smile on my face because I cold totally see my own boys doing this.

    I love the imagery of the duct tapped sword.

    nicole - writespell.com

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  5. I thought it was perfect and just enough. 8PM only last one minute right? This was exactly what I would think 8pm looks like in your house..and it sucked me in and took me there.

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  6. I love this! Slaying dragons and saving the world... as all little boys should be doing at 8:00 p.m.!

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  7. So I'm curious, does this little knight slay you to bits at the word "bedtime?" I shudder to think what would happen if I gave my spawn swords... :)

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  8. I think you did a great job with the prompt - that moment was so full of life and energy, it was enough!

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  9. My first thought was bedtime, too. Hilarious! Goes to show where a mother's focus is, doesn't it? :)

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  10. I love this... I was instantly transported to 8:00 and I think you did perfectly following the prompt.

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  11. Aw these are precious moments, aren't they? I love how you captured it, it instantly put me in mind of my own little G! Great job!

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  12. Love this. The line between real and imagination is really just for the adults. For the kids, it's all just glorious life.

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  13. I think you did perfectly! And I love that your knight in shining armor had some of his armor on backwards- that's exactly the way it is at our house, too! :)

    (Also? I die at not acknowledging 8:am! :))

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