tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post6093632274095774521..comments2024-03-28T17:29:41.606-05:00Comments on Not Just Another Mother Blogger!: WOE: DusseldorfTMWHickmanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-58319890630045114782012-03-05T03:29:45.658-06:002012-03-05T03:29:45.658-06:00And then what??!! Yes, yes, I'm a philistine ...And then what??!! Yes, yes, I'm a philistine ...Red Nomad OZhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03020668094026661054noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-16655107723819582102012-03-03T13:06:23.785-06:002012-03-03T13:06:23.785-06:00Oooh lady, that was a good one!Oooh lady, that was a good one!Andreahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01294308714313220666noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-12036809311700044092012-03-02T15:10:27.885-06:002012-03-02T15:10:27.885-06:00Great stuff! I'm a little puzzled at why Adrie...Great stuff! I'm a little puzzled at why Adrien would isolate her in an alley when someone was following her and why her follower didn't seem to notice the exchange. Maybe you can reverse the roles? Adrien pulls her attacker off of her? <br /><br />Fantastic job with the flow though, and the danger is thick enough it's almost tangible. I love it!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-73061298762332109372012-03-02T11:54:59.701-06:002012-03-02T11:54:59.701-06:00I did not see that one coming! I like the way she...I did not see that one coming! I like the way she isn't startled by the violence of Adrian's act (biting! love it!), just by the suddenness of the movement. Great description of the scene - I could really picture it in my head, even the clack of the heels on the pavement, everything :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-17076784333563629522012-03-02T10:16:42.275-06:002012-03-02T10:16:42.275-06:00This caught me off guard. You did a very good job ...This caught me off guard. You did a very good job of describing Lacy as she arrives. I loved the four-inch heels. They made me say "ouch!" <br /><br />Then the scene in the alley was riveting. These lines were short, but concise to get across the danger, "He saw the whiteness of her skin against the darkness and moved toward her, one hand held at his side. No loud gunshots this close to civilians. A knife was quieter. She opened her mouth to scream." Well done!<br /><br />I am glad Adrien reappeared just in time:~) I enjoyed this take of the prompt. Thank you for sharing it:~)Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15995684156785464334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-14304092536448751532012-03-02T09:28:13.512-06:002012-03-02T09:28:13.512-06:00Ohhhh.....
I'm guessing they didn't order ...Ohhhh.....<br />I'm guessing they didn't order a salad. ;)Lizbethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03449627964374811836noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-56283116579634801442012-03-02T07:28:19.461-06:002012-03-02T07:28:19.461-06:00Haha! I remember that game! Good times.Haha! I remember that game! Good times.TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-4678664824530709332012-03-02T07:24:20.316-06:002012-03-02T07:24:20.316-06:00Cool. I love the idea. This would be a great ser...Cool. I love the idea. This would be a great serial to continue in future posts.dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-87169188989836327282012-03-02T07:14:39.627-06:002012-03-02T07:14:39.627-06:00Ohh.. very nice! It was very reminiscent of my lon...Ohh.. very nice! It was very reminiscent of my long ago days playing Vampire the Masquerade! I would love to see this story continue.Jackiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15012551542418581742noreply@blogger.com