tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post4619703172190160557..comments2024-03-22T18:06:02.887-05:00Comments on Not Just Another Mother Blogger!: A Wish to SurviveTMWHickmanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-669939790582003192013-01-07T17:21:41.576-06:002013-01-07T17:21:41.576-06:00I love that you push yourself with our prompts, an...I love that you push yourself with our prompts, and always with such excellent results! The tension between a dying man and his killer, with such a complicated relationship? Ooh!Cameronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407917830307384493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-74742418176361842612013-01-04T09:14:25.929-06:002013-01-04T09:14:25.929-06:00Well done! I'm curious about the relationship...Well done! I'm curious about the relationships between Karnes and the Joneses. There seems to be much underlying history here.Reneehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00955772837133239769noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-84610929231353309602013-01-03T23:27:11.643-06:002013-01-03T23:27:11.643-06:00Great job with 2 prompts! I love how you dropped ...Great job with 2 prompts! I love how you dropped in bits hinting of a possibly long relationship (or link) between them. I'd be interested to read more!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-5933410808191015772013-01-03T21:44:13.090-06:002013-01-03T21:44:13.090-06:00Such a perfect little teaser. So curious as to wh...Such a perfect little teaser. So curious as to what happened to the father and why Karnes seems to care so much. Much gold to be mined here.Trifectahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16492626287830278024noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-53454608384403411392013-01-03T18:28:36.955-06:002013-01-03T18:28:36.955-06:00Dialog is very good. Excellent work on the intrigu...Dialog is very good. Excellent work on the intrigue. What the heck happened between these two? I'd like to know. And I love the line when Kames, about to die, waxed poetic - like every other dead man. The determined attitude behind that comes through. Nice work!Stephhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06117409443842865395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-78523063909325982512013-01-03T17:46:42.859-06:002013-01-03T17:46:42.859-06:00I think the dialogue is great. Moves the story alo...I think the dialogue is great. Moves the story along. paulajhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05600395742644361353noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-70119230966001029802013-01-03T16:11:51.733-06:002013-01-03T16:11:51.733-06:00This story is really good! I hope we get to read m...This story is really good! I hope we get to read more.Bohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05985370927609164513noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-28708707293029187312013-01-03T12:51:11.889-06:002013-01-03T12:51:11.889-06:00Fantastic use of two prompts!
I think that the ...Fantastic use of two prompts! <br /><br />I think that the relationship between Karnes and Jones's father is the most interesting part of this -- wonder what caused a fall-out deep enough to kill over, yet which didn't affect the goodwill Karnes has towards Jones...IASoupMamahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11222652185240780006noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-78482122259176138932013-01-03T12:14:14.179-06:002013-01-03T12:14:14.179-06:00(applause) you did a great job with the 2 prompts,...(applause) you did a great job with the 2 prompts, with a very worthwhile outcome.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-6908327186996204502013-01-03T10:53:54.233-06:002013-01-03T10:53:54.233-06:00Nice and compactly done! It's interesting that...Nice and compactly done! It's interesting that Karnes allegedly killed Jones's father yet is spending his last breaths talking about what he would have wanted for Jones. It makes the story compelling enough to want to know what comes both before and after while still letting it feel like a complete piece here.Write on Edgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01592841039929797829noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-48201124870355894262013-01-03T10:11:19.816-06:002013-01-03T10:11:19.816-06:00Karnes, about to die, waxed poetic. Just like eve...Karnes, about to die, waxed poetic. Just like every other dead man.<br /><br />That is a very funny line.kymmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18277722091216771412noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-5245897189944666792013-01-03T09:28:26.940-06:002013-01-03T09:28:26.940-06:00wow, look at you with the two prompts...you WORD L...wow, look at you with the two prompts...you WORD LADY. <br /><br />this was very good, the feeling you would get in your belly, that anxiety, the sweet of revenge, it was all there. <br /><br />Sorry I've been MIA..but it was nice to come back here and see your amazing words. :)<br />Kirhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17894442143508446312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-6578360173003982212013-01-03T09:26:26.494-06:002013-01-03T09:26:26.494-06:00Thank you!Thank you!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-68364298762799363952013-01-03T09:25:47.489-06:002013-01-03T09:25:47.489-06:00Thank you! Thank you! TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-45364424398370126262013-01-03T09:24:48.747-06:002013-01-03T09:24:48.747-06:00At least this time--multi-tasking is not my forte!...At least this time--multi-tasking is not my forte!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-41937426460194225552013-01-03T09:24:20.328-06:002013-01-03T09:24:20.328-06:00You're right. It all seemed so clear in my hea...You're right. It all seemed so clear in my head!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-41570554418319492902013-01-03T09:00:09.604-06:002013-01-03T09:00:09.604-06:00Now I want to know what brought these characters t...Now I want to know what brought these characters to this point, and how they relate to each other. Great piece!Draughttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09778248789422474009noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-75872364117263353012013-01-03T07:41:27.377-06:002013-01-03T07:41:27.377-06:00This feels very real and is a poignant story. A l...This feels very real and is a poignant story. A lot of history has transpired between these characters. I want to read more!lumdog2012https://www.blogger.com/profile/04898266027462039531noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-91289501790967654702013-01-03T01:15:27.625-06:002013-01-03T01:15:27.625-06:00Nice! I love that you challenge yourself like this...Nice! I love that you challenge yourself like this. You never fail to deliver. <br /><br />My concrit is that I'm confused as to where "I" was and where "he" was: the phrase "what was left of the cargo hold" followed by "I knew then that my shot landed." Did I miss a scene? Other than that, an excellent job indeed!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-27283620720782369652013-01-02T17:10:11.328-06:002013-01-02T17:10:11.328-06:00Trying to do two things at once, huh? I'd say ...Trying to do two things at once, huh? I'd say ... RESULT!Red Nomad OZhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03020668094026661054noreply@blogger.com