tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post1926900522788967329..comments2024-03-22T18:06:02.887-05:00Comments on Not Just Another Mother Blogger!: Just Like HeavenTMWHickmanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-12509129548859007742014-05-08T14:34:02.006-05:002014-05-08T14:34:02.006-05:00I loved this too...and of course he followed, help...I loved this too...and of course he followed, helpless to do otherwise... What a sweet, but potentially deadly obsession love can be, and you painted that picture perfectly! <br /><br />Great song and great title too, by the way!Valerie Boersmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08372768206512562126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-65385787032651543512014-05-07T10:47:42.595-05:002014-05-07T10:47:42.595-05:00I loved the use of the dream as the vehicle for th...I loved the use of the dream as the vehicle for their connection. I thought you did a great job of creating the dreamscape and Nathan's challenge -- to be her or not? Your descriptions were also well done. I could picture Nathan, as well as the girl. Another thing I liked was how you gradually increased his need for her in the story. It kept me reading and while I suspected the ending, it was still the right one:~)<br /><br />It's nice to know someone corrects the spelling. Do you also add missing words? This is a big issue for me. I've returned to sites and re-read a comment I left and will find several words are missing...<br /><br />One constructive comment: There were a couple of sentences using the word "that." In these cases the word could be removed and the sentence would read just fine. Here's one example: "Still, he could not deny that he was daydreaming about a figment of his imagination." Now try it without the word "that:" "Still, he could not deny he was daydreaming about a figment of his imagination." I only bring this up because it saves words and because it's always an issue with me, as well:~)Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15995684156785464334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-21034238993453028132014-05-06T20:34:55.753-05:002014-05-06T20:34:55.753-05:00Wow. This is beautiful and chilling all at once. Y...Wow. This is beautiful and chilling all at once. You did a fantastic job of setting the mood, and even better, maintaining it. I've got goosebumps still. This is just wonderful. EagleAyehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09456389577129978571noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-64499497414872068592014-05-06T13:46:33.808-05:002014-05-06T13:46:33.808-05:00oh, yes, sometimes the urge and the yearning is to...oh, yes, sometimes the urge and the yearning is too strong. <br />To die, but to live (with the dream, inside the dream)? <br /><br />it felt dreamlike, fuzzy and floaty and delicate. I hope they are happy together somewhere. <br />Kirhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17894442143508446312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-1564211240645303682014-05-06T09:07:56.083-05:002014-05-06T09:07:56.083-05:00I was reminded of the superstition that if you die...I was reminded of the superstition that if you die in your dreams you die in real life. I wonder if he woke up. I loved the detail in the description, and I wonder if he felt like he was being hunted? So intriguing. Lyssa MLyssa Medanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07350926829113722058noreply@blogger.com