tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post8960323865493789457..comments2024-03-28T17:29:41.606-05:00Comments on Not Just Another Mother Blogger!: Lucifer Always CollectsTMWHickmanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-81146168923340790422012-04-15T15:50:35.632-05:002012-04-15T15:50:35.632-05:00Nice! You got me thinking...demons are not known f...Nice! You got me thinking...demons are not known for their patience, and they may have their OWN debts to pay (or avoid).Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-21481719663905450452012-04-14T05:35:13.486-05:002012-04-14T05:35:13.486-05:00Brilliant writing. I loved how you used sensory de...Brilliant writing. I loved how you used sensory detail to bring the reader deeper into the scene. Well done!Misha Gerrickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06364173848456424521noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-55766796358794560262012-04-13T22:01:31.879-05:002012-04-13T22:01:31.879-05:00Oops, I meant that you were right about the POV. ...Oops, I meant that you were right about the POV. That's what I get for trying to type on my phone!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-78956022500493501512012-04-13T21:13:42.117-05:002012-04-13T21:13:42.117-05:00What a great example of setting a scene and using ...What a great example of setting a scene and using all different senses to create a sense of fear and emotion. I like that you use a lot of sound and the play of shadows with the bit of fire left. <br /><br />The hope he has and then having it dashed adds another touch of interest that kept the climax of the piece really exciting.angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14974137283220034062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-33996933991384864072012-04-13T19:16:47.913-05:002012-04-13T19:16:47.913-05:00You're right. Thank you for reading!You're right. Thank you for reading!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-22250582486830051322012-04-13T16:36:56.970-05:002012-04-13T16:36:56.970-05:00Thank you!Thank you!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-655392400205922002012-04-13T16:36:38.671-05:002012-04-13T16:36:38.671-05:00Thank you! It sort of fit with the 'abandon ho...Thank you! It sort of fit with the 'abandon hope' piece we did a few weeks ago. At least that is what I had in mind.TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-39798314284292621472012-04-13T13:11:29.679-05:002012-04-13T13:11:29.679-05:00Brilliant. Love the descriptive setting. My concri...Brilliant. Love the descriptive setting. My concrit would be to remove the last line. As much as I love it, I think "An icy talon gripped his ankle, and a wail of despair was released from Melchior's lungs as he was dragged back into the darkness" has more impact. The last line is delivered with a different POV and we lose the fear of the victim. (Also if we change Melchior's lungs to his lungs I think it'll read a little smoother)<br /><br />I loved the use of the cold and my favorite: the air became suddenly oppressive. Great take on the prompt!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-28516832748340650722012-04-13T10:39:54.998-05:002012-04-13T10:39:54.998-05:00Ohhhhhh, that's good!Ohhhhhh, that's good!Lizbethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03449627964374811836noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-79953190579415618102012-04-13T08:55:29.257-05:002012-04-13T08:55:29.257-05:00Oh my... most excellant descriptions! I love it.Oh my... most excellant descriptions! I love it.Jackiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15012551542418581742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-54264096654747049692012-04-13T08:27:46.841-05:002012-04-13T08:27:46.841-05:00Ooohhh, do not mess with anything that hisses when...Ooohhh, do not mess with anything that hisses when it talks. Great job painting the ominous nature of the scene. And I love that you gave him the tiniest shred of hope....before ripping it away :)Carriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03472645003197467754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-73349503748793960622012-04-13T07:34:48.761-05:002012-04-13T07:34:48.761-05:00Excellent descriptive writing. I really enjoyed re...Excellent descriptive writing. I really enjoyed reading this!The Bookwormhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18028402015561101112noreply@blogger.com