tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post3262586838819539750..comments2024-03-28T17:29:41.606-05:00Comments on Not Just Another Mother Blogger!: Come Back to MeTMWHickmanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-2672935099326924272013-02-19T08:52:24.583-06:002013-02-19T08:52:24.583-06:00No good ever comes of conjuring the dead... poor A...No good ever comes of conjuring the dead... poor Adelaide. Cameronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407917830307384493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-4162393642868311452013-02-18T12:27:47.229-06:002013-02-18T12:27:47.229-06:00Oh, dear. I feel her pain, but this seems like th...Oh, dear. I feel her pain, but this seems like there are all kinds of ways for this to go wrong! The images of mixing her blood with his are shocking; well done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-15546116505910927242013-02-17T18:55:20.562-06:002013-02-17T18:55:20.562-06:00A selfish act of love, to pass the dying to pull o...A selfish act of love, to pass the dying to pull one already gone from this world, should not go without consequence. There is a slice of tragedy baking here. Nicely done!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-18932374996766606252013-02-16T19:48:01.098-06:002013-02-16T19:48:01.098-06:00You do a great job bringing both the grittiness of...You do a great job bringing both the grittiness of the battle scene and her singlemindedness. <br /><br />The details of the ritual are perfectly creepy. I have a terrible feeling about the whole thing... Write on Edgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01592841039929797829noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-4338922461936943432013-02-15T23:39:25.497-06:002013-02-15T23:39:25.497-06:00Thank you so much!Thank you so much!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-59174162849487241822013-02-15T15:02:19.155-06:002013-02-15T15:02:19.155-06:00This is so well-told. As I read, I could see Adela...This is so well-told. As I read, I could see Adelaide walking over the battlefield and the hands reaching out to grab her. Great story.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-80537592687579396872013-02-15T12:00:38.216-06:002013-02-15T12:00:38.216-06:00I'm back for second read. This time it's f...I'm back for second read. This time it's from the Write at the Merge prompt site. I read the story again. This time around I got such a strong feeling of desperation and loss. Maybe it's Adelaide's walk through the battlefield, which as I said in my other comment, you described so very well.<br /><br />This time the story leaves with a scent of sadness, but I will not dwell on it too long. I will, however, appreciate the skill of the writer:~)Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15995684156785464334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-19171444006920136952013-02-15T00:05:52.879-06:002013-02-15T00:05:52.879-06:00I like the descriptions of the battlefield scene. ...I like the descriptions of the battlefield scene. I thought the blood part was a little creepy, though. At first I thought she was going to bring him back to life, but then I wondered if she was killing herself instead.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-28309054064561272902013-02-14T17:41:28.550-06:002013-02-14T17:41:28.550-06:00I always read stories aloud. It gives me the rhyth...I always read stories aloud. It gives me the rhythm of the words. This story flowed very easily. Also, your descriptions were well done -- sensory and made me feel as I was walking that battlefield in search of my loved one. <br /><br />I don't why she took the potion and what will mean, but I can't blame her for it. This was a powerful story. Also, it was nice to read a post from someone who also did both the Trifecta and Write on the Merge prompts.<br /><br />Since none of the reply options will give you link to my site, I'm leaving you the link. I hope you'll stop by sometime and give it a read. I'd appreciate the feedback<br /><br />http://sarahealy.com/index.php/2013/02/14/fiction-the-handmade-card/Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15995684156785464334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-23671888974432308302013-02-14T16:09:50.309-06:002013-02-14T16:09:50.309-06:00I wonder if he 'comes back to life' or ret...I wonder if he 'comes back to life' or returns as a rotting, animated corpse. She is playing with fire.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-55559293713937354642013-02-14T12:50:40.846-06:002013-02-14T12:50:40.846-06:00Uh, oh. These things never go as expected. The dip...Uh, oh. These things never go as expected. The dipping of her fingers into his chest and marking her lips and chest was both such a loving and creepy gesture.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-72003067777963241082013-02-14T08:43:46.464-06:002013-02-14T08:43:46.464-06:00Eternal love or eternal damnation?I hope it is the...Eternal love or eternal damnation?I hope it is the first-for love's sake:-)Wonderfully well written:-)Atreyeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15400190416839538182noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-18460524011741493342013-02-13T17:48:17.556-06:002013-02-13T17:48:17.556-06:00i love stories about knights in battlefields and t...i love stories about knights in battlefields and their fair maids! :)<br />but what i love most is eternal love -- whether ending happily or in a tragic fashion. :)<br />and i definitely enjoyed your vivid description.<br />happy valentines day ^^Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-41846381322090984732013-02-13T16:26:10.200-06:002013-02-13T16:26:10.200-06:00This is amazing writing!This is amazing writing!Bohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05985370927609164513noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-68158758307534042462013-02-13T15:40:52.470-06:002013-02-13T15:40:52.470-06:00This is so moving and beautifully written. I love...This is so moving and beautifully written. I love the description of the scene of the battle. It's just perfect. lumdog2012https://www.blogger.com/profile/04898266027462039531noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-24557290918176195332013-02-13T13:44:06.032-06:002013-02-13T13:44:06.032-06:00All knights are brave in death, I suppose. Thank y...All knights are brave in death, I suppose. Thank you for reading!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-19408815082365313422013-02-13T13:43:09.413-06:002013-02-13T13:43:09.413-06:00Thank you!Thank you!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-14470763882073227612013-02-13T13:42:43.197-06:002013-02-13T13:42:43.197-06:00I suppose it's the same as when a mom doesn...I suppose it's the same as when a mom doesn't flinch from wiping her own kid's nose--the familiar icky stuff is better than a stranger's icky stuff. Lol!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-68688072602341441152013-02-13T13:40:21.413-06:002013-02-13T13:40:21.413-06:00Yes, indeed there is!Yes, indeed there is!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-7173652944843357492013-02-13T13:39:46.639-06:002013-02-13T13:39:46.639-06:00You are absolutely right--it is confusing. I will ...You are absolutely right--it is confusing. I will change it as soon as I can. Thank you for reading!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-69978699719400708192013-02-13T13:38:26.137-06:002013-02-13T13:38:26.137-06:00Thank you!Thank you!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-91041127857943623262013-02-13T13:38:06.881-06:002013-02-13T13:38:06.881-06:00Thank you!Thank you!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-73612248921453603532013-02-13T13:30:53.210-06:002013-02-13T13:30:53.210-06:00I liked your battlefield scene... and finding her ...I liked your battlefield scene... and finding her knight as if he had fought off an entire horde. Very brave indeed. I am not exactly sure of the purpose of the ritual and what the end would be. I guess I can decide for myself, the way I would like it to be. tedstrutzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09853272125990540823noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-45291802640513845782013-02-13T12:49:24.171-06:002013-02-13T12:49:24.171-06:00I just finished watching the BBC show Merlin so I&...I just finished watching the BBC show Merlin so I'm familiar with magix like that. It's beautiful. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1079589059457212218.post-15618703401497788242013-02-13T11:30:53.678-06:002013-02-13T11:30:53.678-06:00It's interesting that she was worried about st...It's interesting that she was worried about staining her hems when she was dipping fingers into blood not minutes later haha :D I love the mystery and magic of this!Draughttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09778248789422474009noreply@blogger.com